Indie Ink time! I was challenged by Jamelah this week and I challenged Jason Hughes with the prompt "homeless".
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In the middle of the night, London is dark and wet. The air is solemn; the city's lost souls fill it with their tearful regrets. They turn dark corners, searching for a spot of light to shock them from their dreariness. If, by chance, the fog lets itself be penetrated by the beams of the moon, puddles of silver light might be found on the ground - accumulations of rain drops that failed to fall on someone's head. New shoes on dejected feet kick through the water, dying to run. But running won't take them away from the words that fell on deaf ears just moments ago. Wet with lust are the bodies that own these new shoes that are quickly ruined on the city's cobblestoned streets: groins wet for sex, minds wet for every other kind of stimulation that London promises. The next morning, these downtrodden bodies put an older pair of shoes on their dejected feet and trod through the misty gray day, waiting for the dark wet night to fall upon them again, so they can continue their search for whatever it is they came to London to search for. And no matter how disheartened they become, or how dark and wet, these lost souls somehow always forget to tell London good-bye.
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My prompt was: "There's something I forgot to tell you..."
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8 Fuck Yeahs:
So dark and melancholy. Beautifully sad.
I love when people take on prompts this way!
Fuck yeah is right. It's short, to the point, and descriptive. The imagery is deeply effective.
I hope next time you'll write something longer.
Welcome to the blogroll. :)
Thank you, ladies! Grace, you can click on the Indie Ink label to read my longer stuff. :)
Your imagery is fabulous, the way you put your words together is just WOW. my only problem is that your site is very hard for my old eyes to read with the bright green and very soft green, LOL.
I'll come back next week. ;)
I admire the short response you gave. So full of descriptions and so much depth. You did well with this prompt. I totally imagined myself back in London while reading it. Well done.
Drama Mama, I don't feel like black on white is very me. Feels too crisp and clean! But I have thought of messing with it to make it easier to read and I'll think about it again! Thanks for hanging in there and reading despite the contrast! :)
Mandy, I got this idea cuz I imagine myself back in London all the time! It was the first place my hubby and I lived together so it somehow feels like our proper home. Though my happy memories of London outweight the dark ones, this idea came from the fact that I, myself, have forgotten to tell the city good-bye... I'm glad it actually conjured up the city for you, I'd be so disappointed if I didn't do it justice!
this is really nice :D and I kept thinking of Jack the Ripper for the first bit O_o :S
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